ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 02/08/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 04/08/2021
Question: Many young people change their jobs and careers. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
(IELTS Academic – 31/07/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 5.0+ and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (5.0+):
There are many young people, they want to change their jobs often. Because many of them think it is a the very best idea for them future, their parents may be believe that it will make they lose their faces. In this essay, the reasons behind this phenomenon will be vastly discussed in details, and a conclusion will be shared at the end of the essay.
One good thing about change jobs is that young people can learn new skill. If they do the same job for a long time, young people will not learn anything new. Secondly, you can make friends in different companies, as you can get to meet new people. For example, there was a story about how an Australian woman in her mid-20s changed her career. She got bored working in law, so she want to make websites. Since then, she like making websites and don’t wanted to work in law anymore.
However, some companies don’t want person who change jobs. Companies don’t like who jump work as they think a job jumper will be bad. For example, a young American man was no job after changing jobs many times. He had said that employers hate him because he jumped between work many times. Since then, that man still has no job. It is easy to see why changing careers is a bad idea.
In conclusion, young people changing jobs is both a good and bad thing. I also think it’s both a bad and good since while it is nice to stay in company for a long time, I also think you should learn as many as possible for any job in the future.
Word count: 279
ANSWER (8.0+):
In recent years, those just entering the workforce have been alternating between occupations more frequently. Whether this practice has been beneficial to workers or not has been a subject of fierce debate. While some believe that changing jobs equips young people with a more expansive skill set, I contend that it is more likely to impair one’s career due to a hesitation on the part of companies to hire employees who change jobs constantly.
One major reason behind the rise of this phenomenon is that young people are still seeking their passions. As many are unclear about their career path, they try out jobs to discover what they would enjoy pursuing professionally. If they are dissatisfied with a given position, young people will find another job that better suits them. The other key reason is young people want to be equipped with a diverse skill set. As different jobs utilize different knowledge bases, young people often find it advantageous to acquire a wide-ranging variety of professional skills. Therefore, in the future when a new job is offered to them, youths will be better prepared for the work entailed in this position.
However, this phenomenon has negative effects on workers as companies are reluctant to hire for uncertainty. Employers often hold a prejudice against those who frequently alternate between occupations as they think a person who does so will not be able to contribute to their company long-term. To cite an example, according to a survey conducted by Forbes in 2011, 70% of American employers would reject hiring so-called “job hoppers” on the basis that they want prospective employees to devote themselves to a company in the long run. These employers have also expressed that if someone cannot promise to remain loyal to their company, then it would be counterproductive to hire and commit resources to them. Based on this study, it is justifiable to claim that constantly changing jobs can hinder a person’s career.
In conclusion, young people change jobs to acquire multiple skills and find out what they desire to do in their careers. However, I contend that the drawbacks are much more substantial since this might impede one’s career opportunities. Nonetheless, it can be predicted that young people’s careers will continue to change in their search for true passions.
Word count: 381
WORD LIST:
| ENGLISH | TIẾNG VIỆT |
| Alternating between occupations | Nhảy việc |
| Expansive skill set | Bộ kĩ năng rộng/lớn |
| Impair sth | Suy yếu một cái gì đó |
| Career path | Con đường sự nghiệp |
| Diverse skill set | Bộ kĩ năng đa dạng |
| Knowledge base | Kiến thức cơ bản |
| Entail | Kéo theo |
| Prejudice | Định kiến |
| Job hopper | Người nhảy việc |
| Prospective employee | Nhân viên tiềm năng |
| Devote | Cống hiến |
| Corporate ladder | Bậc/nấc thang nghề nghiệp |
| Take the plunge | Làm điều gì đó mạo hiểm, liều lĩnh |
| Welfare | Phúc lợi |
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