ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 01/11/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 02/11/2021
Question: Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it is positive while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
(IELTS Academic – 30/10/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 5.5 and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (5.5):
Scientists believing that computers may become more smarter than human. While some say that computers may put humans out work, I still say that this is a good thing because they make less mistakes in doing particular things than humans.
On the one hand, computers are to do many things faster than human can since they can do complex things rapid speed and accuracy. Because this, many companies are replacing human being at work to speed up their work and rate of goods. This can be seen in some shops where human being are replaced with robots and computes that help buy their items faster. Consequently, this can be a negative impact as there won’t be many jobs for people to do if this continues..
However, computers becoming more intelligence than humans is good because they make less mistakes than people. Computers are designed to do particular task repeat, and they may make more fewer mistakes in process. Therefore, many companies use computers to keep make stuff while maintaining quality. This is evident with the use of machines in manufacture. They help make products companies very fast with no mistakes in comparison to human beings. Thus, computers become more intelligence than humans is good as it improves product quality.
In conclusion, while computers can lessening the need human beings, I argue that this is a positive trend since computers make no errors in doing certain tasks. Once human beings know how computers can challeng them, they can take action to make less smart computers.
Word count: 254
ANSWER (8.0+):
The advent of artificial intelligence has brought many advancements to computer technology and scientists predict that these computers may become more intelligent than human beings someday. While some warn that computers may eventually lessen the need for human workers, I still assert that this is a positive development overall considering how they are less error prone than humans.
To begin with, the concern that computers will make human labourers redundant is valid to a degree. As they are not hampered by any physical or mental limits, they are able to rapidly undertake most tasks at a rate faster than humans. Realizing these advantages, many companies have begun to steadily replace human workers to improve efficiency in their production process. This can be seen in some convenience stores in developed nations where human cashiers have been replaced with self-checkout machines that aid customers in purchasing their items faster. Consequently, some see this as a negative development as it directly threatens job opportunities for less skilled workers.
However, computers gaining more intelligence than humans may help reduce mistakes. As computers are programmed with algorithms to accomplish particular tasks repetitively, they are likely to make far fewer errors. Therefore, many companies utilize these machines to ensure a steady production of their goods while maintaining quality standards. This is evident with the use of sorting robots in the logistics industry in China. Machines there are tasked with precisely assigning items to their designated parcels and they can do this at a rate of 18,000 per hour with a much lower margin of error in comparison to that of humans. Thus, computers gaining superior intelligence over humans is a positive development as it improves product quality and facilitates business growth.
In conclusion, despite the legitimate concerns related to computers curtailing the need for human workers, I contend that this phenomenon is a positive development since computers are less susceptible to errors generally. Once human beings are aware of the challenges computers pose, they can take action to control the risks presented by such disruptive technologies.
Word count: 341
WORD LIST:
ENGLISH |
TIẾNG VIỆT |
Advent of artificial intelligence |
Sự phát triển của trí tuệ nhân tạo |
Advancements to computer technology |
Sự phát triển của công nghệ máy tính |
Lessen the need for sth |
Giảm nhu cầu cho một cái gì đó |
Error prone |
Dễ sai sót |
Make human labourers redundant |
Làm cho nhân công con người thừa thãi |
To be hampered by sth |
Bị cản trở bởi một cái gì đó |
Efficiency in their production process |
Sự hiệu quả trong quy trình sản xuất |
Self-checkout machines |
Máy thanh toán tự động |
Job opportunities for less skilled workers |
Cơ hội việc làm cho nhân công có trình độ thấp |
Programmed with algorithms |
Lập trình với thuật toán |
Margin of error |
Phạm vi sai số |
Facilitate business growth |
Tạo điều kiện cho doanh nghiệp phát triển |
To curtail sth |
Làm giảm cái gì đó |
Less/more susceptible to sth |
Khó/dễ dàng bị ảnh hưởng bởi cái gì đó |
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