ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 27/09/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 28/09/2021
Question: Some people believe that the world should have only one government rather than a national government. Do you think the benefits of this system outweigh its disadvantages?
(IELTS Academic – 25/09/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 6.0 and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (6.0):
People from all over the world want to have one global government because they believe it will make country work. However, I disagree with this and it is better for countries to their own government.
Having a world government can make countries cooperate better. I think a global government faster in solving many issues because the have more money and technology to use to resolve such problems smartly. For example, APEC meets year to discuss trade policies among membr countries. I saw they work together to enact policies that can boost goods and services exchange to improve their economic development. As a result, each member saw their mport/export rates go up by 70% percent and citizens’ incomes have risen by 20%..
On the other hand, I think a global government nations to use their power to make themselves richer or powerful. These nations will do anything to empower or enrich themselves or their allies, while causing great harm to the world. For example, I read that the America government has been known to twit the rules and regulations of their international relationships to war on any country to rich themselves. As a result, the infrastructure of many por countries was destroyed and many people have died from America’s tendency to start wars.
In conclusion, I think a globl government is not the best idea because the disadvantages are more apparent than the advantages. I believe that countries must still have a national governments, but they must continue to cooperate with the rest of the world to become part of this global scoeity.
Word count: 263
ANSWER (8.0+):
With globalization accelerating at a rapid pace, there have been growing calls to have only one global government on the basis that it would motivate countries to pool resources together to resolve shared issues. However, I disagree with this notion since such advantages will be dwarfed by the disadvantages, the biggest of which is the potential abuse of power that could be exercised by influential nations.
The biggest advantage of forming such a government would be that it could encourage member countries to contribute collectively to solve common problems. A global government would be able to act faster in solving issues efficiently since they would have more resources at their disposal. For example, members of the European Union were asked to cooperate in tackling the Syrian refugee crisis of the last decade. Using their collective political and material resources, the European Union was able to house and integrate millions of refugees into its constituent members’ societies, providing much needed safety for a vulnerable population from their war-torn homelands.
However, a global government presents the risk of member nations abusing their power to serve their own interests rather than those of the entire world. For instance, in the United Nations, the closest approximation of a global government, nations can exercise their right to block or enact measures that can empower or enrich them or their closest allies, much to the detriment of the world as a whole. For example, two of the UN Security Council’s chief members Russia and China have been accused of exercising their veto power to block new security policies that will challenge their regional power, despite them being genuinely beneficial to the wider world.
In conclusion, the disadvantages of a global government, chief of which is possible rampant abuse of power, are far more substantial than its advantages. Moving forward, countries should retain their national governments, but continue to reach out globally to encourage mutual cooperation.
Word count: 319
WORD LIST
| ENGLISH | TIẾNG VIỆT |
| Cosmocracy | Chính phủ toàn cầu |
| Unitary government/authorities | Nhà nước/Chính quyền đơn nhất |
| Centralized government | Chính quyền tập trung |
| Motivate countries to pool resources together | Khuyến khích các nước cùng quyên góp nguồn lực |
| Compromise | Thỏa hiệp |
| Abuse of power | Lạm dụng quyền lực |
| All-powerful entity | Cơ quan toàn quyền |
| At their disposal | Tùy ý sử dụng |
| Refugee crisis | Cuộc khủng hoảng tị nạn |
| Collective political and material resources | Các nguồn lực chính trị và tài nguyên chung |
| War-torn homelands | Quê nhà bị chiến tranh tàn phá |
| Serve their own interests | Phục vụ cho lợi ích riêng của họ |
| Much to the detriment of sth | Gây tổn hại nặng nề cho cái gì đó |
| Exercising their veto power | Thực hiện quyền phủ quyết |
| Challenge their regional power | Thách thức quyền lực trong khu vực của họ |
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