ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 23/08/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 24/08/2021
Question: In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents choosing to self-educate their children at home rather than sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?
(IELTS Academic – 21/08/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 5.0+ and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (5.0+):
Many parent in my country, Vietnam, are choose to teach their children at home, don’t approve them go to school. Some of the children are very sad because they can not play with their friends and they might detrimental effects of the future. Others can be happy because they don’t havae to do homeworks. This essay shall defend my stand on the matter.
Those who strongly oppose to the school of thought homeschooling maintain that their youngsters can not meet other people, so they will lack of socail skill and might feel shine during conversatins with other if work in a company or integrate into a novel intelligent environment. To the best of my recollection, they can only interact with their family like their parents, grandparents and brothers and sisters if they have some to play with. I also maintain that , homeschooled children can not go to university, which will detrimental make them unhappy and can not have a bright future. They will difficulty applying for university since they cannot take certificates that been awarded by their family. Thus, homeschooling children have not many chances to studying in a college program.
On the other hand, many of others believe in the school of thought there are good things about homeschooling and more than the bad things. For example, a child who studied at home was able to make several new theories physics because her parents had taught her over a thousand lessons in physics and she is really good at the theories. Secondly, parents grow closer with children, and parents can spend hour with their children when teaching them so they can be kind with them, confirming the relationship between them.
In conclusion, there is more good than bad in homeschooling. It is important that parents have the will to issue homeschool diplomas that can be accepted by university.
Word count: 309
ANSWER (8.0+):
Recently, there have been more parents choosing to educate their children at home rather than having them taught at school. While there are clear disadvantages to homeschooling, I think they are largely outweighed by the advantages of a personalized curriculum for the child and the strengthening of bonds between children and their parents.
Admittedly, there are clear disadvantages to homeschooling such as potential deficiency in social skills and lack of accreditation. Firstly, children who are taught at home often lack essential social skills. Indeed, they can only interact with their immediate family and not make new friends. This context deprives them of the opportunity to interact with others and thus many children will likely have trouble behaving well in social situations. Secondly, homeschooled children sometimes struggle to attain accredited qualifications to enter tertiary education institutions. As parents are not authorized to issue diplomas like educational ministries, they will have difficulty in applying for university since many institutions such as those in Vietnam only accept diplomas that have been certified by the ministry of education. Thus, homeschooled children will likely have more limited opportunities to pursue tertiary education and build a successful career.
However, the advantages of homeschooling such as a personalized curriculum and stronger bonds between parents and their children cannot be ignored. Firstly, parents can construct a personalized curriculum that suits the needs and strengths of their children. For example, there were media reports recently about a homeschooled child from Japan who was able to solve complex calculus equations in under 30 seconds as the curriculum his parents had devised was centered around developing his math skills. Secondly, parents can forge a stronger bond with their children while teaching. Personally teaching their children can allow parents to engage in meaningful learning activities and spend more time with their children, as opposed to the few hours they have in the evening if their children are sent to school. Consequently, they can be more understanding and patient with their child, strengthening the familial relationship between parents and offspring.
In conclusion, I contend that the advantages of a personalized curriculum and stronger familial bonds between parents and their progeny outweigh any perceived disadvantages inherent in homeschooling. It is advisable that the government implement policies that grant parents the authority to issue homeschooling diplomas that can be accepted by universities and colleges alike.
Word count: 390
WORD LIST:
| ENGLISH | TIẾNG VIỆT |
| Advantages of a personalized curriculum | Ưu điểm của chương trình giảng dạy cá nhân hóa |
| Potential deficiency in social skills | Có thể thiếu hụt các kỹ năng xã hội |
| Deprive (sb of sth) | Tước đạt (của ai đó một cái gì đó) |
| Tertiary education | Giáo dục đại học |
| Centered around sth | Tập trung xung quanh một cái gì đó |
| Stronger familial bonds between parents and progeny | Mối quan hệ gia đình bền chặt hơn giữa cha mẹ và con cái |
| Inherent disadvantages | Nhược điểm vốn có |
| The authority to issue homeschooling diplomas | Thẩm quyền cấp bằng tốt nghiệp giáo dục tại nhà |
| A case for educational reform | Một ví dụ về cải cách giáo dục |
| A prerequisite for sth | Một điều kiện tiên quyết cho một việc gì đó |
| To administer a graded test | Đưa ra một bài kiểm tra |
| Devise a learning plan | Lên kế hoạch học tập |
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