ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 18/10/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 19/10/2021
Question: Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(IELTS Academic – 16/10/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 5.5 and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (5.5):
It is easy see that many people in the world want to travel the world these days. However, many of them still say that international tourism push away people of different cultures.
Firstly, some of these foreign tourists are criminals and go abroad to sell drugs or illegally transport people, and they can make locals not liking tourists coming in to their country. For example, criminal tourists go to Vietnam to sell drugs like cocaine and heroin to the local people there. This made the locals Vietnam to regard those tourists as bad guys who love doing such terrible things and make money out of them. That is why there is a school of thought that it is easy to see how international tourism can divide people of different cultures.
However, international tourism can bring people different cultures together. When local people jump across countries or from a country to another, they more about the cultural costumes of those countries. For example, when people from America get to visit many African countries like Egypt, South Africa and Kenya, they will more understand the rich cultur of those nation and what make them different from each other. Also, those American tourists can have more love and respect about what they learned from those countries and might be using them in their own culture, which can increase rate of globalization and economic growth.
In conclusion, international tourism can cause argument between cultures due to the criminal tourists. However, it can closer those cultures by making people who not part of them to observe cultures through tourism and maybe intergrate those traditions into their own amazing culture. Governments must go after these criminal tourists to protect their tourism industries in the future.
Word count: 289
ANSWER (8.0+):
Some assert that international tourism does not unite but rather divides people of different cultures. I disagree with this stance since international tourism is effective in encouraging cultural exchange.
Critics argue that international tourism can cause friction between cultures since some foreign tourists may engage in impolite behaviour. A certain segment of foreign tourists often travel abroad to participate in behavior that is not acceptable in their own countries, which can leave locals with a bad impression of the countries those tourists are from. For instance, Thailand has long been popular for sex tourism, where foreign men travel there to engage in prostitution with women of varying ages, some of them underage. This has caused the locals in Thailand to regard these foreign nations unfavourably and to treat people from these nations with suspicion.
However, in the majority of cases international tourism can forge mutual understandings between cultures as it fosters meaningful exchanges. By travelling abroad, each nation’s population will likely appreciate more about the culture of the country in question. For example, many Americans had a negative perception of Cuba due to the historically fraught relationship between the two countries in the 1960s. However, once travel restrictions were lifted, many came away surprised with the rich cultural traditions that populate the country, from its well-preserved urban architecture to its varied musical influences and styles. Hence many Americans started to perceive Cuba more positively owing to their greater firsthand appreciation of its culture.
In conclusion, though international tourism can divide cultures due to the unethical actions of a certain segment of foreign tourists, it can also unite those cultures by fostering valuable exchanges between them. Once governments start to enforce laws against such unethical behaviour more strictly, international tourism will further flourish in terms of profits and the encouragement of inter-cultural exchange.
Word count: 302
WORD LIST:
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ENGLISH |
TIẾNG VIỆT |
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Divide people |
Chia rẽ mọi người |
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Encourage cultural exchange |
Khuyến khích trao đổi văn hóa |
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Cause friction between sth |
Gây ra xích mích giữa ai với ai |
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To engage in impolite behaviour |
Thực hiện hành vi bất lịch sự |
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Leave a bad impression |
Để lại ấn tượng xấu |
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Sex tourism |
Du lịch tình dục |
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Prostitution |
Mại dâm |
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Regard these foreign nations unfavorably |
Nhìn nhận các quốc gia này không tốt |
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Treat sb/sth with suspicion |
Đối xử với ai đó với sự nghi ngờ |
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Forge mutual understandings between cultures |
Củng cố sự hiểu biết lẫn nhau giữa các nền văn hóa |
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Foster meaningful exchanges |
Thúc đẩy các cuộc trao đổi nhiều ý nghĩa |
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To have a negative perception of sb/sth |
Có định kiến tiêu cực về ai/cái gì |
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Historically fraught relationship |
Mối quan hệ lịch sử căng thẳng |
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Well-preserved urban architecture |
Kiến trúc đô thị được bảo tồn tốt |
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Varied musical influences and styles |
Những phong cách và ảnh hưởng đến âm nhạc khác nhau |
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Firsthand appreciation |
Sự đánh giá cao (thông qua trải nghiệm) trực tiếp |
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Unethical actions |
Việc làm phi đạo đức |
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Inter-cultural exchanges |
Giao lưu giữa các nền văn hóa |
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