ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 16/08/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 18/08/2021
Question: Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(IELTS Academic – 14/08/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 5.0+ and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (5.0+):
Many high education people do not agree about scientificial research being done by our government rather than individual company with many people say the government can do it better. The writer of the essay completely disagree with the school thought and shall serious explain the motives of this ill action.
On the one hand, individually finance scientific research has done a lot for innovation because they are more free do whatever they want and they want to spend their money on good actions. Those who do research for companies are free to think of whatever want and let their imagine go crazy. If the governments do not believe them, they cannot do the research, and therefore, lose their money to other people. Inaddition, companies should be charge of scientific research because of freedom for the scientists who is doing good for the society.
To the best of my recollection, it is advantages if governments do scientific research because they can have a lot of money. Private companies can do wrong the research because they can change it to make a lot of money to give in to there greed. On the opposite, governments make research to have more solutions to solve problems such as poverty, global warming, diseases and women’s rights. Others such as computer machine, human rights and animal rights. For example, the government’s railway system was chosen because there were less accidents on it than the private company’s. This show that governments better at scientific research.
In conclusion, private research can innovate a lot, but government research is meant to be the better option. Scientists will able to pay more attention to government research and they can become heroes to save the nation.
Word count: 285
ANSWER (8.0+):
There has been significant discourse surrounding the proposal for scientific research to be conducted by governments rather than private entities. While some would argue the opposite on the grounds that it engenders greater innovation, I contend that governments can conduct better research as they are less susceptible to corporate influence.
Admittedly, there have been cases where privately funded scientific research has stimulated innovation. Individuals who conduct research on the behalf of commercial interests are typically encouraged to think creatively in developing new solutions to pervasive problems. For instance, SpaceX is a for-profit corporation that is leading its competitors in terms of innovating space travel. Founded and managed by tech magnate Elon Musk, it has introduced new solutions to existing problems in space transportation such as reducing production costs on their rockets by using 3D printing technology and mass production methods. Furthermore, SpaceX has pioneered the utilization of reusable rockets as half of them have flown more than once with little to no refurbishment. From this case, it can be understood why some argue commercial entities should be in charge of conducting scientific research.
However, the case for governments conducting scientific research is stronger. With private companies conducting such research, they are more predisposed to financial incentives since they are primarily driven to boost profits. In contrast, governments conduct scientific research often with the altruistic aim of finding solutions to various societal problems in their respective nations. To cite an example, a private medical firm in Ghana was tasked with conducting research and producing 600,000 doses of their own COVID-19 vaccine. However, these doses did not meet WHO standards after testing as a result of the research process being rushed to maximize profits. It was only when the Ghanian government intervened to replace the previously made doses with their own newly certified products that the public finally felt at ease.
In conclusion, although privately sponsored scientific research has an important place thanks to the competition that drives innovation, I believe that government sponsored research exerts a more positive impact on society and the public good. In the near future, it can be predicted that the scientific community will be able to welcome more scientific breakthroughs thanks to the funding of the state.
Word count: 372
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ENGLISH |
TIẾNG VIỆT |
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Initiative |
Đề nghị/sáng kiến |
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Private entities |
Công ty tư nhân |
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Susceptible |
Dễ bị ảnh hưởng (bởi một điều gì đó) |
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Commercial interests |
Lợi ích thương mại |
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On behalf of |
Thay mặt cho (ai đó) |
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Magnate |
Tài phiệt, ông trùm |
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Pioneer |
Tiên phong (làm một việc gì đó) |
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Predisposed to sth |
Có khuynh hướng làm một việc gì đó |
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Skew |
Thay đổi/làm méo mó kết quả (dùng khi nói về các nghiên cứu) |
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Intervene |
Can thiệp |
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Revolutionary leap |
Bước nhảy vọt mang tính cách mạng |
| Hypothesis |
Giả thuyết |
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