ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 09/08/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 10/08/2021
Question: Some people think children have the freedom to make mistakes, while other people believe that adults should prevent children from making mistakes. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
(IELTS Academic – 07/08/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 5.0+ and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (5.0+):
In this day and age, many individuals have been talk about children have the freedom to make mistakes. There is a school of thought some parents should or at least must not let their children make mistakes, while other school of thought about stop them making more mistakes is discuss in this essay and conclude with an opinion.
The life of every child is important. Therefore, adult shouldn’t let their children making mistakes. Adults must teach children how to do something the right way. It will provide full protection to the child’s life. To give an example, children as Japan were teached to solve math problems when they are little kids. The way they were taught help their school teachers to teach faster but they still can understand the lessons and get good marks. That is why Japanese schoolchildren can do hard math problems when they are 8 years old.
However, allowing children to make mistakes is better for them because they learn to be better people and may be they can feel happy about themself. That will create a future with all happy children and parents. For instance, when a child fails in school since he was fight other students, that child can face important decisions by their teachers and parents. The child learns to be nice to other. Children can then act more better in future. As a result, they will behave better, learn to solve problems of the world.
In conclusion, although stop children from making mistakes can be a good thing, I think that children should infinitely be allowed to make mistake to learn and grow as member of a family. Thus, parents should be more easy with their children to allow them to grow.
Word count: 289
ANSWER (8.0+):
When it comes to parenting, there has been long-standing discourse over whether children should be allowed to make mistakes. While some would argue that parents should not let their children make mistakes, I contend that mistakes are vital to fostering in children a greater sense of responsibility.
Adults should take a preventive approach to their children making mistakes if it is aimed at expediting the learning process. An adult can comprehensively instruct a child on how to do a particular task properly, eliminating the need for correction and re-learning. To give an example, children in China are diligently guided by their teachers in solving math problems using standardised methods developed by math professors working for the Ministry of Education. These methods have been proven effective in increasing rates of correct answers, allowing school teachers to move on to the next lesson more speedily. That at least partly explains why Chinese schoolchildren can solve some complex math problems by the end of primary school.
However, allowing children to make mistakes is developmentally better as it instills greater personal responsibility. For instance, when a child fails a test in school since he has not revised his lessons thoroughly, that child should face the consequences of his failure which might include low grades and detention. Hence the child learns that he should be better prepared for the next test. Without their parents interfering to prevent failures from happening, children cannot accept ownership of the situation and take corrective measures to address it. As a result, they are likely to become upstanding adults who are accountable for their own behaviours, striving to be their best to solve their own problems.
In conclusion, although preventing children from making mistakes can be a valid parenting approach to an extent, I hold firm to my belief that children should be allowed to experience failures to learn meaningful lessons. Thus, parents should be more relaxed with their children whenever they make an error to allow them to better learn and grow.
Word count: 333
WORD LIST:
ENGLISH |
TIẾNG VIỆT |
Foster | Nuôi dưỡng |
Preventive approach | Phương pháp ngăn chặn/phòng tránh |
Expedite sth | Đẩy nhanh tiến độ của một việc gì đó |
Standardised methods | Phương pháp tiêu chuẩn hóa |
Detention | Đình chỉ |
Interfere | Can thiệp |
Accept ownership for sth | Nhận trách nhiệm cho một việc gì đó |
Corrective measures | Biện pháp sửa sai/trừng phạt |
Upstanding person | Người đáng kính trọng |
Cognitive benefit | Lợi ích trong nhận thức |
Off-limits | Quá giới hạn |
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