ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 08/11/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 08/11/2021
Question: The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(IELTS Academic – 30/10/2021)
This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 6.5 and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.
ANSWER (6.5):
Some people say that the best way to solve global environmental problem is to raise the fuel cost for vehicles. I would argue against this as I think there alternative and better solutions to this issue.
On the one hand, the world’s environmental problems can partly be solved by raising fuel costs. As vehicles using fuel can release carbon dioxide into the air, it is only logical that there should be way to solve the problem. This can be done by introducing tax on fuel which can stop people from driving and therefore decrease the output of carbon dioxide. Such a tax has introduced in France where the government charges a tax on any amount of fuel used to fill up cars. This has led to the country seeing a significant drop in greenhouse gas emissions since that tax was enacted.
On the other hand, I don’t think raising fuel costs is the best solution. These problems are too big to be solve by just raising fuel costs. Another solution suggesting is to promote clean energy sources. Renewable sources such as wind, solar and nuclear are also good at solve the world’s environmental problems as they don’t produce much greenhouse gases. Some countries in the world are completely dependent on renewable power to meet their needs and they are doing their part to solve global environmental problems.
In conclusion, raising fuel costs alone isn’t the best solution to solving the world’s environmental problems. Therefore, alternative solution such as promoting clean energy should be taken at the same time as raising fuel costs. Once those solutions are taken, the global environment can slowly improve.
Word count: 273
ANSWER (8.0+):
Many people argue that an increase in fuel prices will solve the problem of the environment. While this idea could help reduce the amount of harmful fumes, I maintain that a global awareness campaign is the most feasible option.
On the one hand this policy might help cut down the emissions from private vehicles which pollute the air in big cities. Indeed, as the cost per kilometer increases, people would have to consider reducing the distance and the frequency at which they travel on the roads. If there is a need to travel, commuters might also turn to more cost-effective and greener means of transportation such as buses or electric bikes. In both of these cases, the total amount of noxious fumes that cause air pollution is limited.
However, an increase in fuel prices can only solve a limited part of the complex environmental issues. In fact, causes of pollution are diverse, involving the use of plastic bags in shopping or chemicals in both agriculture and industry which contaminate both water and land. Therefore, the most effective solution would be running a world-wide campaign that raises the consumer awareness about the environmental cost of their shopping habits and presses companies to reduce the consumption of noxious chemicals and resolve to greener cultivating and manufacturing methods.
In conclusion, while increasing fuel costs can partly solve the environmental problems by discouraging private vehicle usage, the ideal solution would be making the public and enterprises aware of these issues. I am also convinced that once more resolute actions are taken, humans can reverse the effect of climate change and environmental problems.
Word count: 268
WORD LIST:
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ENGLISH |
TIẾNG VIỆT |
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Harmful fumes |
Khói độc hại |
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Global awareness campaign |
Chiến dịch nâng cao nhận thức toàn cầu |
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Emissions from private vehicles |
Khí thải từ các phương tiện cá nhân |
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Distance and frequency at which people travel on the roads |
Khoảng cách và tần suất mọi người di chuyển trên đường |
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Cost per kilometer |
Phí trên mỗi ki lô mét |
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Cost-effective and greener means of transportation |
Phương tiện giao thông tiết kiệm chi phí và thân thiện môi trường |
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Noxious fumes |
Khói độc |
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Solve a limited part |
Giải quyết một phần |
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Complex environmental issues |
Các vấn đề môi trường phức tạp |
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Environmental cost of their shopping habits |
Hậu quả lên môi trường do thói quen mua sắm |
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Consumption of noxious chemicals |
Sự tiêu thụ hóa chất độc hại |
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Greener cultivating and manufacturing methods |
Phương pháp trồng trọt và sản xuất thân thiện môi trường hơn |
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Discouraging private vehicle usage |
Không khuyến khích sử dụng phương tiện cá nhân |
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Resolute action |
Hành động kiên quyết |
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