ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 08/08/2022
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 09/08/2022
Question: There are several factors that motivate people to stay in the workforce. Among them, money is the most important factor. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
(IELTS Academic – 06/08/2022)
ANSWER (8.0+):
It is argued that gaining a substantial amount of income is the most vital factor among several for people’s motivation to remain employed. I totally disagree with this viewpoint since there are more significant elements including job prospects and the recognition in the workplace.
The main reason for my dissenting view that money is the main driver for continued employment is that having a clear path for career progression is more vital. More specifically, they can be offered opportunities for development and to be able to climb the career ladder when they devote themselves to the company they are working for. To illustrate, normal office staff member would more likely decide to work diligently as they know that they can rise up the hierarchy to become a manager who has more power if they show commitment to the company. Therefore, the desire to become a better version of themselves may stimulate individuals to remain in the workforce.
Another justification for why I believe people tend to make a long-term commitment to a profession other than money is that they can be recognized for contributions and achievements in the workplace. This is because they would feel appreciated when they receive praise or rewards from their colleagues and superiors. In other words, their talents and working proficiency are highly valued, leading to the enhancement of their self-actualization. These compliments also generate emotional connections between workers and the whole organization, acting as a source of inspiration for them to continue to work for it.
In conclusion, I strongly oppose the idea that high income is the most crucial factor for employees to continue working as job promotions and acknowledgement at work are just as pivotal.
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WORD LIST:
ENGLISH | TIẾNG VIỆT |
Gain a substantial amount of income | Có thu nhập đáng kể |
Have a clear path for career progression | Có một con đường rõ ràng để phát triển sự nghiệp |
Climb the career ladder | Leo lên nấc thang sự nghiệp |
Rise up the hierarchy | Được thăng chức |
Become a better version of themselves | Trở thành một phiên bản tốt hơn của chính họ |
Make a long-term commitment to a profession | Có cam kết lâu dài với một công việc |
Enhancement of their self-actualization | Nâng cao khả năng tự hiện thực hóa của họ |
Emotional connections | Những kết nối cảm xúc |
Acknowledgement at work | Sự công nhận tại nơi làm việc |