CHỮA ĐỀ THI THẬT BAND 8.0+ IELTS WRITING TASK 2 NGÀY 04/09/2021

ESSAY INFORMATION:
Written by: Xuân Phi, 06/09/2021
Supported by: Ex-BC Examiner, 07/09/2021
Question: It will be better for both society and individuals if driverless cars — cars can drive themselves — become more widely used. To what extent do you agree or disagree？
 (IELTS Academic – 04/09/2021)

This week’s post includes two essays – one marked 5.5 and one marked 8.0+; this is meant to make a comparison in terms of the use of vocabulary, essay structure and grammar between the two.

ANSWER (5.5):

Cars are becoming better over time, and driveless cars will certaintily the best part of future human. Some does not belie that it will better for individuals and society if driverless car become more useful, but I think car like can be both bad and good for individuals and society.
On the one hand, driveless cars better since they can blow off steam in them as these cars drive on their own, divers are free to do whatever they like and watching movie or sleeping throughout a trip. Therefore, my friend was able to watch three movie while taking a trip from France to Italy in new driverless Tesla car. Also, driverless cars are more convenient for old people like my grandma who is about 80 years old. An expensive vehicles can allow those people travel without me help him to get on and off the cars and they won’t be dangerously to other drivers.
For the society, these cars equip state of the art latest technology that can do to keep driving or not to keep the passengers and nearby vehicles safe, so self-driving cars will not cause any traffic accident at all. As a result, roads are safer to travel and less people dying in traffic. That will help reduce the neeed for hospitals and even funeral facilities. This means that governments should definitely invest in buying or renting cars for their citizens to ease the need of expensive hospitals equipment.
In conclusion, driverless cars is convenient for individuals like me and society because they make driving more relaxing and they more friendly to seniors and disableds. 
Word count: 269

ANSWER (8.0+): 

Since automotive technology is advancing further with each passing decade, the once impossible dream of driverless cars has become a near-reality. In my estimation, this development can aid both individuals and society on the grounds that it fosters greater convenience, safety and accessibility.
At the individual level, driverless cars make driving more convenient and accessible. First of all, drivers can utilize their spare time for more enjoyable activities in an autonomous car. As these cars can drive autonomously and do not require the driver’s attention, they are free to read a book, play games or talk with their family without having to look at the road for example, thus making the road-going experience more tolerable and liberating. Secondly, driverless cars offer greater accessibility for motorists who often have difficulty driving, such as senior citizens and disabled individuals. Such vehicles can afford those people the freedom of independent car travel while also posing little to no risk to drivers around them.
In addition, self-driving cars are beneficial to society since they are less likely to cause traffic accidents. As these cars are equipped with sensory technology that perceives the surrounding environment better than humans can, they can make split-second decisions such as speeding up, slowing down or braking to an immediate stop to keep passengers and nearby vehicles safe. As a result, traffic safety will improve by a large margin and the likelihood of traffic fatalities will be lessened. According to McKinsey, an American management firm, it is predicted that by the mid-21st century, when self-driving cars have become ubiquitous, the rate of traffic accidents in the US will be reduced by 90%, thus potentially saving millions of lives.
In conclusion, owing to the more pleasurable driving experience and accessibility for less capable drivers, as well as their potential to reduce the rate of traffic accidents, I believe that driverless cars will be of great benefit to individuals and society. In order to popularize driverless cars, they must be permitted by the government to operate on all paved roads.
Word count: 338

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